- WHAT is your story topic (not the title–this may not come until the end), but rather tell, as concisely as possible, what your story is about?
My story topic is about the prison system and how it affects people.
- WHY are you compelled to write this story?
I have always been interested in jail and prison and how the syetem works. I used to want to work in criminal justice and even though I’ve changed my mind on my career path, it still interests me.
- WHAT is your (major) driving point? Are there ancillary (minor) points that you intend to make as well?
People in prison are kept in a vicious cycle that keeps them in the system.
- WHO is your specific, target audience? What other audiences might you engage with this story?
My target audience are people that work in criminal justice and people that work in the prison system or with the law.
- WHAT is your rhetorical strategy? Here, cite as many possibilities that you can of the following appeals: pathos—ethos—logos. Explain in each case why the appeals that you cite are appropriate to your story. Does your strategy construct persuasion toward an argument, an idea, an opinion, a redesign—or perhaps a combination of these persuasions?
I am writing a persuasive paper which would hopefully make people have a different way of thinking towards the prison system.
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I don’t know much about the prision system so I am excited to learn more about it through your essay. I am not sure how the system works but I know the United States has the highest amount of people in prision compared to other countries. Your topic seems very interesting and will most likey influence the way a lot people view prisons after reading your essay.
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This topic is so interesting because it is not something that I ever thought about. I think it’s cool how you are taking your interest and writing about it. You definitely should try to pursue a career in something of or relating to this topic! I’m curious to learn how the prison system works throughout the weeks and your opinion of it as well.
-explain what sparked your interest in this topic
-why do you want/ why should one change their views towards the prison system?
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Brielle, a possibility for your essay is to consider some sort of alternative (similar to how Samantha Dunn was bringing us to consider alternatives to pain pills.
What about the concept of restorative justice? Is this a theory and/or practice that you’ve ever encountered? Do you think it is an alternative to the vicious cycle of crime and punishment that you mention?
Realize that if you decide to go this route, then like Samantha Dunn you have to bring us to the problem, and then the struggle as it exists within the current “solutions” (which are not solutions, as you point out). This doesn’t mean you have to arrange your composition in this order. You might begin with the alternative, and then reverse-engineer to show us what this process improves. I guess I’m saying that somewhere you have to show us what’s at stake in the essay.
I agree too with Chai that I’d like to know how you became interested in this landscape of our society (criminal justice.) Perhaps someone in your family is a police officer, FBI agent, corrections officer?
If you were to go into a career within criminal justice what do you envision as your role? How could you make a difference within that role?
Here’s some background on restorative justice:
What is the concept of restorative justice?
Predominately restorative justice is used for the victim, specifically with a kind of mediation and/or restitution from the offender. Restorative justice is based on bringing together the victim, the offender, and the community; all have equal parts in repairing the relationships destroyed by crime.
What is the theory of restorative justice?
A more formal definition is this: Restorative Justice is a theory of justice that emphasizes repairing the harm caused by criminal behavior. It is best accomplished through cooperative processes that allow all willing stakeholders to meet, although other approaches are available when that is impossible
What are the goals of restorative justice?
The main goals of restorative justice are as follows: 1) Accountability: Restorative practices allow offenders the opportunity to take accountability for the harm they caused, and the chance to take action towards repairing that harm and restoring their place within the community.
How does restorative justice process help the victim?
Restorative justice gives victims the chance to meet or communicate with their offender to explain the real impact of the crime – it empowers victims by giving them a voice. It also holds offenders to account for what they have done and helps them to take responsibility and make amends.
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PS: I am only seeing one peer review on your blog site. Is it possible that you still need to accept comments from your other workshop peer, or are you still waiting for comments? Comments from the Friday workshop must appear on our blog sites by the end of class time (1 pm). Every student should receive two peer reviews on their current draft by 1 pm Friday, every week.
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